英语四级作文点评(四级英语作文模板万能句型评论引言)

导语：英语四级写作之点评（3）

写作要求

For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a public service advertisement about no smoking on campus, including the current situation of smoking on campus, dissuading students from smoking on campus, and what you do. You should write at least 120 words, no more than 180 words.

写一则关于学生校园不要吸烟的公益广告，内容包括学生校园吸烟的现状、劝阻学生校园不要吸烟、以及你自己是怎么做的？

下面是一位同学的习作：

As we all know, smoking is harmful to health. In today&39;s make joint efforts to build a smoke-free campus.

按句点评

1. As we all know, smoking is harmful to health.

[推荐表达] be detrimental to与is harmful to意思相近，可参考学习。

[推荐表达] It is universally acknowledged that ...与as we all know意思相近，可参考学习。

[近义词表达学习] know近义表达有cognize/ recognize/ realize/ foreknow

1.1 In today&39;s make joint efforts to build a smoke-free campus.

[拓展辨析] 动名搭配 make...effort 在语料库中出现过 1734 次

[推荐表达] establish /erect与build意思相近，可参考学习。

整体点评：

1.作者采用了适当的衔接手法，行文基本流畅；

2.作者词汇基础扎实；

3.作者句法基础扎实，文中使用了很多复合句。

4.文章段落结构中，第二段和第三段太短，第一段太长。

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